Hi, SilentConfession, it's VioletBlade here with your requested review!
For starters, I just wanted to say that I think you've found your way into the world of next-gen perfectly! ;) This was impeccably written and I'm glad I got a chance to read it!
Plot: The plot is very unique, simply because you just don't find many next-gen stories based upon death. In that way, you've made your piece one of a kind. Another way you've done that is by beautifully describing the heart-wrenching emotions Molly feels during her sister's death. It was very believable and made my heart ache for Molly! Finally, I really do like the way you didn't tell us who it was until almost the ending paragraph. I was going to tell you it was confusing, but I made up my mind I liked it instead because it gave us an urge to finish the piece. I actually found myself conflicting with myself, whether it could be Victoire, or Rose even! I had no idea. Originally I thought it could be Victoire because you said it was a Teddy/Molly II pairing (though I didn't see much of that, really, either) but I was actually glad to see it wasn't. To me, the two don't really seem all that compatible in next-gen fanfiction, but if an author really wanted to, I suppose they could make them friends. Just the parents they have I would think would make that difficult for them from the start! Overall, though, the flow was great, (some sentences broke the flow a tiny bit, but it was recovered easily) and the pace was just right, so bravo!
Characterization: I must admit, I don't see hardly any Molly II fanfiction out there, and it's something that kind of saddens me! Thus, I'm really glad you picked her as your main character. You see all sorts of stuff about Rose (especially Rose), Victoire, Dom, Lily, even Lucy, but not poor Molly II! And I think you've written her brilliantly. Her emotions were raw, something I definitely would expect from the loss of a sister, and she really made the reader connect to her situation. I also like the way you've portrayed Lucy, as well, as someone who was like Molly a little, but was mostly her own person and everyone loved her for that!
Grammar: The only thing I think I want to comment on that made me go 'that broke the flow a little' were the two sentences in the first two paragraphs that repeated the word 'wasn't' twice in the sentence. I feel like those sentences were much harder to get my head around and it distracted from the story, but that's just my opinion!
Thanks for the wonderful read, and thank you so much for requesting from me. I hope you've found my review helpful in some way!
Author's Response: Sorry for the late response but you're review is VERY appreciated!
Thank you! I've always been wary of it as there seems to be so many littered with cliches and i just didn't know where to go to find an original plot line. Then i thought of Molly and I really wanted to explore her and what it might be like to lose a sister, it was actually just supposed to be exploring their relationship but somehow i felt like this might be better at exploring that dynamic. If that makes any sense at all.
Hm, it's NOT going to be a Molly/Teddy!!! Definitely not, Molly/OC (Original character) not Teddy. I don't see him ending up with one of the Weasley's either so don't worry there will be none of that in this story or just vague illusions to his past thing with Victoire or whatever. Of course, he play's an important role in the Weasley and Potter household but I agree, that their parents and his history, i just see him ending up with some unknown witch or something. I don't know.
Anyway, thank you so much for your comments and lovely review! i'll be coming back for if you don't mind :D