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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hello! I'm so so so sorry for how long it's taken me to get around to reviewing this! I'm mortified it's been nearly a month since you requested! I've tried reviewing a few times before but my browser kept closing down for some reason and i'd lose what i wrote! Anyway, sorry again for this incredibly long wait.

I like that your continuing to highlight the difference between the muggle and magical world. I liked how Lily was just so confused about not being able to use her hands and the whole not scoring business. I like that this fic is so centred around football and i have to admit that every time i see your status updates about football i think of Annie and her obsession.

I especially liked the details you added in here that made the story seem a lot more rounded and rich. Some of the things i liked was just the comment about how long you've loved your team. It's so true and realistic because it's easy to love a team when they're doing good, but when their rubbish and you still support and love them it's a completely different thing.

I also liked that you pointed out that she doesn't get on with all of her family. So many write the Weasley's as this huge happy family that all love each other or all just really get along and are best mates. It's rare that that would happen in a family. But i loved that there are people that she just didn't really get along with. I also liked the highlight about the wildness of family and how she doesn't really associate with that so much. This makes Lily seem so much more of a real and multi dimensional character.

The repetition of 'great' was also an interesting touch. I feel like it covered a lot about what Lily is feeling about her family. It seems like something people when they just don't what else to say about their family or how else to describe it. I almost feel like it's used to cover some other feeling up perhaps? When i hear people say great repeatedly in real life it always seems like it one of those 'yes but' type things where it's like i love them but or they're great but. I don't know exactly what i'm trying to say with this comment exactly and i'm having a hard time trying to express exactly what i'm feeling about this but i thought it sort of covered her feeling so of uncertainty of her family.

As i said before, you've done a great job with giving Lily more dimension in this chapter. She seems like someone who bottles up all her feelings because she sees it as a sign of weakness or something. I think this was a great addition to trying to explain why she left her family in the first place. It almost seems at some points that she feels left out of her family, like she doesn't quite belong? I may be reading way too much into but there was a few lines that sort of gave me that impression.

Even with this chapter that was basically all about her leaving and there were some great things in there that made it a bit more believable, i still felt like her reasons fell a little flat and i'm still having trouble buying into it completely at this point. I'm probably being a bit dense and I'm sure you'll explore this later on and do a great job with it. Does she feel like she doesn't measure up to her family? Is she trying to find where she fits into her family and perhaps wants to try and find that out herself without being overshadowed by her family? So many possibilities.

Anyway, this was a lovely chapter and i really enjoyed reading it and seeing the relationship between Annie and Lily grow! :D I hope my ramblings made sense, i had a hard time articulating some of the thoughts that i was having but i hope that i got my point across. :D

Author's Response: It has taken me forever to answer this, and for that I am very sorry. *hides*

I completely understand browser problems - I actually always type up my reviews in a text document, because I got tired of losing things when my computer misbehaved. :P

Lily's major issue with her family is that she just finds being around them really stressful. On one level, the reality never really changes, but on another, just cutting yourself off from it and avoiding it can help you avoid the tension and anxiety the situation is causing. If that makes sense?

I'm really glad you're continuing to enjoy this - I have so much fun with this story. (And, amusingly enough, some of my football predictions seem to be on the way to coming true! Which is very exciting for me.) Your ramblings definitely make sense, and they are always so, so helpful. ♥


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