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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
An indignant Malfoy is so ridiculously amusing. I was laughing out loud throughout this chapter, especially the bit when Al said he went out to get a mocha and then was all, "Oh, did you want one too?" When Al's stomach growled and Scorpius flipped out, thinking someone was trying to get into the room...I almost died.

I think my favorite part of this chapter was Al constantly comparing Scorpius to his sister. He stamped in just like my sister does when shes in one of her tempers, which is pretty much all the time. Bahaha, that is just such a perfect description of Scorpius.

Then Al silencing him for chewing too loudly! That was great. I felt kind of bad when Al basically said they only took Scorpius because they needed more man-power and that he really kind of sucks as an Auror.

The Bulgarian mobster isn't Krum, is it?! That's all I could think about when you said Durmstrang and Quidditch player...

I can't believe that girl knew they were spying on her! She must be more observant than they are, that's for sure. I wonder how they'll explain themselves...

One minor correction: contended silence. - I believe that should be contented instead.

I'm also really enjoying the length of these chapters. I don't mind long chapters but sometimes I just want to sit down and just read some nice, short chapters and the fact that this story is hilarious just helps me gobble it up. Love it! :)

Author's Response: Haha, it's so true! Putting Malfoys in situations that make them indignant are a staple of Potterverse humour, and Albus is really, really mean to him at all possible moments. It doesn't help that Albus has some access and understanding of the Muggle world, whereas Scorpius is still too much of a pureblood to be able to navigate that world with success. Poor fellow - I really have to give him the long end of the stick in one of these chapters. XD

Oh dear, your review is reminding me how much eating takes place in this chapter. It's all about food! I've never done that before, and now it's striking me as entirely odd, but also very funny.

Anyway, I'm not sure whether to make the mobster Kum - I was going to initially, but that might be too easy. For now, I'm going to leave him faceless in a sort of "star part" role as the person everyone talks about, but whom never appears until either the very end, if at all. I might have something else in mind for dear Bogey. ;)

I'm now wondering what a "contended silence" would sound like. Is it an argumentative silence? :P I've fixed that now - thank you for mentioning it!

It's nice to write short chapters once in a while, too. For a humour or action/adventure story, it works in the plot's benefit to write short, snappy chapters with lots of cliff-hangers - chapters that, predominately, end with each scene rather than combining scenes as I tend to do with my other stories. I'm really glad to hear that the short chapters are working for you - after all the long chapters around, I'm sure it's a nice break!

Thank you so much again for reading and reviewing this story, Missy. It means a lot to hear from you! ^_^


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