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Review:Aderyn says:
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Interesting chapter. I liked seeing the scene with Bella and Aberforth/Abe (love the nickname :) ). I guess I never saw them interacting when I read the books, but it makes sense, since they both live in Hogsmeade.

You have some great description in here. This in particular was really vivid: No resurrection awaited you from the ashes, as it would for the death-cheating phoenix. Melting you like wax, running your face into one big blurry mess of a picture. Burning and swirling and tearing; and you were screaming for it to stop, but underneath it all, fire is cold. Not hot. Cold and heartless. Like this room.

I love the progression of her thoughts and how it's illustrated in that passage.

Also, the ending of the chapter is well done. Great job describing Brandon in terms of what he drank.

Overall, this is a nice chapter, and a nice blend of lighter and darker parts. I wonder what those consequences Garrett Brandon (who, by the way, sounds a bit western "this here business") mentioned are...

Author's Response: Hi Aderyn!

Haha, I love Abe too. He's so...Abey. :)

I'm interested that you picked the fire description out, as I thought that was a little too dramatic to be honest, but maybe not. Thanks!!

OMG, a western Garrett Brandon...Never crossed my mind when I wrote that. I wa strying to make him sound official and stuff. Wow, that's a really interesting point.

Thank you.


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