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Review:CambAngst says:
Back again for another chapter!

Wow. Something occurred to me as I was reading Pansy's interaction with her mother. If it wasn't bad enough that she's so isolated most of the time, the only person she ever really interacts with is this sad shell of a person who's utterly lost without Pansy's father around to tell her what to do and think. No wonder Pansy has lost her grip. Although it does sound like she starts to get it back somewhat in this chapter.

I really liked your concept of Azkaban. Using wards to take away the prisoners' magical powers as opposed to using Dementors was a really clever idea. And I think you hit it right on the head. If you've never known life without magic, it would be like losing an important body part. Combined with the harsh environment and the isolation, it probably would drive a person mad.

The only part of the chapter that I thought could have used a bit more exploration was Pansy's actual interaction with her father. I think it could have benefited from going into more detail about how her father reacted. Did he look as though he wanted to respond? Did he cower away from her? Was he merely blank? I also would have liked to see you explore more of Pansy's feelings about her father, directly. You talk about how Pansy felt about her mother continuing to visit the broken shell of her husband, but you never really address how her father's condition affects Pansy. I'm thinking it must have hurt at least a little bit. Maybe we'll read more about it later.

Then we're back to the manor, and your writing, as always, is filled with a lot of poignant little details that really enhance the story for me. The characterization of Pansy's writing, for instance, or the details of the family's interactions with Gringotts. Even the banister gets a good, thorough treatment.

It sounds like it was a very hard decision for her to lock away the Amortentia that reminded her of Draco, but at the same time it's a good sign for her nascent recovery, if that's really what we're starting to see.

All in all, another wonderful chapter! Can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing again! I really appreciate your reviews!

I'm glad that you liked my concept of Azkaban. After the fiasco with the dementors during the last war I thought that it would be a priority for the government to prevent that from ever happening again. However, without its guards Azkaban would have needed another defense- thus, the idea of the magic-depriving wards was born. I definitely agree that it would be insanely damaging to be constantly under their effects.

Hmmm... I see where you're coming from. In my mind he was blank, unresponsive. From the years he had been in Azkaban his mind has deteriorated to the extent where he really isn't the man she knew before. I guess that didn't come across well enough in the chapter... Thanks for pointing that out! As for your second point, her father will be mentioned in later chapters as Pansy compares her decisions with what his would have been. More detail in this scene, however, certainly wouldn't hurt. :)

I'm glad that you enjoy the amount of details I put in- they are some of the most interesting aspects of a story to write, I find.

The next chapter should hopefully be put into the queue shortly! I'm glad that you're continuing to enjoy the story.


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