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Review:TheGoldenKneazle says:
This was written amazingly. The way that you had flashbacks that then became flash-forwards really brought out the theme of how Lucy was trying to get better, and I think that for this challenge, it's a brilliant entry.

You captured Lucy's rollercoaster emotions so perfectly! Her pain felt so horribly real, and the words seemed straight from the heart; so contrasting, yet through it all, Lucy was such a touchable person because of it. I love how you used second person POV, too, because it also made her seem very true and relateable - something which can often be difficult to capture in angsty writing, if the author gets too carried away and doesn't make sense any more.

Molly was such a wonderful character. She seemed like such a rock, someone for Lucy to hang on to, and she was always making herself a team with Lucy which was just amazing and very older-sisterly. Her mum and dad were also very REAL characters, trying to help their daughter in obeying her wishes AND in what was best for her!

I loved it, Helen, although it was so terribly sad - the ending being happy gave such hope :D
~TGK

Author's Response: Hey there Lottie :)

The whole flashback-y flashforward-y mix match of tenses seems to have become a /thing/ that happens in my one-shots at the moment, but I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I'm painfully aware of how sensitive this topic was and so I didn't think I was able to not leave things on a positive note, so the challenge seemed to fit with that.

Anyway, thank you for such a lovely review and I'm glad you liked Molly and her parents (because they really made this for me, I think).

Thank you!

AC


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