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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
I don't think I've ever read a Percy/Audrey story so this was a new venture for me. I thought it was rather cute. Audrey is just a bit quirky and Percy is kind of an idiot. I was kind of annoyed that he was such a jerk to her when she was saying goodbye. Though to me it seems like there was some mixed signals about their separation because Audrey didn't seem to think it was as big of a deal as Percy was making it.

I liked how you went back to the moment they first met too, and that line Audrey said about people who meet in airports are 75% more likely to fall in love. Bodes well for them...I was actually waiting for Percy to run back to the airport to stop her, so I was glad that he did. Now they can live happily ever after. :)

I like the detail you put into this story, especially about Heathrow, and for explaining why Audrey was flying in a plane rather than Apparating from place to place - though I would imagine they'd eventually let her retake her test, no?

The only suggestion I have is to maybe have someone look over your grammar and mechanics. There were a few errors that I noticed while I was reading but nothing too major that a quick edit can't fix.

Otherwise, very cute. I enjoyed it.

Author's Response: I read my first Percy&Audrey story through the review tag as well! I loved writing Audrey, she was kind of based off me a little :) Yeah, I was considering having their fight in the story but in the finished project I didn't.
Haha, the airport scene was so much fun! I loved it.
Thank you! I love Heathrow Airport and I've been there before so it was kind of easy to write about (hence, the imagery) I suppose they could make her retake the test, never really thought about it.
Yeah, I just got a beta and I'm about to read through the edited version. Thank the Lord for betas right?
Thank you!
Jaz, x

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