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Review:LivingFairytale says:
Hi! I've always wanted to read a story like this, and now I finally stumbled across it, yay. I think Neville's parents are a little under-appreciated, but they were able to defy Voldemort three times! So I'm glad I found this story.

Anyway, i'm drifting off- that was an awesome start! The first sentence just pulled me in immediately, it was so intense. The way you used description was magnificent, and the characters felt so real! It was like I was actually there. You also wrote Voldemort very, very well. I always find it difficult to write him, but you did it perfectly.

My favourite part was when Alice got tortured, yes it was incredibly sad, but so wonderfully written! I could almost feel her pain. I also liked the part when Alice returned home very much. I just have one little question; what did Alice do at Azkaban all on her own? I didn't quite get that. I know she's an Auror, but she's pregnant right?

I think you did an amazing job on this first chapter, and I can't wait until you update again.

Keep it up!
x Livingfairytale

Author's Response: Oh, this review has made my day! Thank you so so much! You've really made me smile. I'm glad you like my description and characterisation, they are so hard to get right so I'm really pleased when I do manage it! I loved writing Voldemort, surprisingly, I just really enjoyed finding the best ways to get inside the reader's head. I'm thinking of doing something similar in another one shot. I'm glad you thought the torture was good, I was very unsure on how to write it because I wanted to convey this very raw emotion but also the physical pain, and the way Alice's mind reacts to it. I wanted to almost have you believing that the Cruciatus curse has a different effect on different people, and maybe wondering how you would feel and what you would be thinking about.
To answer your question, Alice is pregnant, but she is still at work, and that's why she is at Azkaban. I'm not entirely sure what she's been doing but she has been there because of work. At the moment, she's about five months pregnant. So you can see that she is and it is affecting the way she moves and lives, but she is not far along enough to be on maternity leave. I hope that helps you understand.
Also, just to clear things up, this is a one-shot, so there wasn't going to be any other chapters. I am thinking of doing a short story about Alice and Frank though, which would go side by side with this, so do look out for it!
Thanks again for reviewing, I'm so grateful!

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