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Review:In The Shadows I Dwell says:
Hi,
I have to start by saying I love how you decided to tell this in parts, it's always been one of my favorite techniques that any writer could use and I really love how you've used it here, showing how their relationship as it is progressing and how each of the characters and the events in their lives changes over time. I also like how you started it with their meeting and ended it with the birth of a child, because it really gave me as a reader a sense of the life they have lived together, I also have to admit I love how you managed to bring the Epilogue into this as well.

I'm going to talk about Victoire, because I really love how you've characterized her, I never actually saw her as possibly being a Ravenclaw until I read this, and I really think you added something unique to her character by making her shy. I also love how Teddy was there for her right from the very beginning and how she too is there for him when he needs her most, at the graveyard, it's easy to see what makes their relationship so strong. I also like how the story is told from her perspective because it's always interesting to see how each of the characters from the next generation is written. I also loved the similar lines which opened each section, which immediately showed what stage of her life she was in, and where Teddy was during it within the space of a single line. They worked really well, as did the rest of the story.

If there was one thing I noticed that really stood out, it was the fact that this was so short, well it's not really, but when reading the time just seems to vanish, and I was left wishing that it was over a few chapters or just was a little longer. Other than that the writing was wonderful, the descriptions and detail that you've given are really great and really add to the relationship you are showing over the span of 17 years, and was a really great insight into their relationship which you've managed to show in this one-shot so wonderfully!

Keep up the great work!
~ In The Shadows I Dwell

Author's Response: Hello again!

I'm glad you liked the "stage" format of this piece. I wanted to try to jump between the important points in Teddy and Victoire's relationship without things seeming too disjointed. It's good that you thought I included all of the valuable pieces with appropriate detail.

I agree that Victoire as a shy girl seems somewhat unusual. I always see people write her as being vivacious and extravagant, and as with most of my work, I wanted to take a different direction. I think her quiet nature and sweetness makes the relationship seem more innocent and serves to bring her closer to Teddy, who is obviously hurting a lot. I'm happy that the similar formatting of each section helped you acquaint yourself with their relationship in a pleasing way.

It sounds like what you're saying is that the flow was good, but it was a little short for your taste. I can understand that -- this was my first foray into next-gen, really, and I didn't want to get too ambitious. I'm sure I'll revisit this relationship in a future story, if that helps.

Thanks so much for your kind review! :)

-Amanda


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