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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
All I can say is WOW.

Your characterization is without a doubt perfect. You played right into Remus's insecurities and gave him an edge as well. Sirius can be a difficult character to get right, but you did it flawlessly. You gave him that air of mischief yet that shadow of a haughty pureblood status was still ever present in his voice. Like you said..."There is the hint of his usual drawl, the posh pureblood-drawl, which he has tried without success to be rid of." I thought that you characterized Tonks wonderfully too. Especially when she says..."Sometimes I just think – you - you’re difficult, Remus.”

I also really loved this line...

"One last Marauder, one last joker left in the game, yet it is no longer about foolish boyish trends that you used to think filled your lives."

It just seemed to grasp my attention right away.

The flow of your story was smooth and done amazingly well for writing it in second person. I did find one little typo(?) I believe so I wanted to point it out...

"still stand clear in you head."

I think you meant "your." I am not as good at picking up little things in second person so I maybe wrong, but again I wanted you to know about it.

Overall, I think this is top of the line slash done is a unique way. I could feel the emotions throughout the piece and it tied it all together even more.

Keep up the great writing! =)

-SR17

P.s. I am going to be adding this to my favorites.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I'm pleased that you liked it, and that you picked up on the things I really wanted to portray; Sirius's haughtiness, Remus's insecurities and Tonk's confusion. Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm happy you'll be adding this to favorites as well. :)

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