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Review:In The Shadows I Dwell says:
Hi,
It's InTheShadowsIDwell from the forums here with your first review! I'm really sorry about the length of time it has taken me to get around to posting these for you, I wish I could have sooner, but I'm here now. Okay, I don't read a lot of James/Lily, probably because I really do love Severus/Lily more, but I really like how you've managed to capture their relationship in this piece and how the world is for them during Voldemort's first rise to power. It's interesting seeing Lily at her family home, probably because of the way Petunia seems to be reacting to everything, and how James sees this. It's also very interesting seeing things from his perspective as he was brought up with magic while Lily was not, the differences, and the comments he makes really were a nice detail in this piece.

I really loved the first line, although I don't know what it's like for snow to be a day late, it immediately gave me as a reader a sense of the time that the story was taking place in, and the first thing that came to my mind was Christmas. I also love the attention that you give James to Lily, although it seems like a simple line: "She is so beautiful." Alone and just there really in it's own way captured how much he truly cares for her and it was just a lovely way to show this. I also like how he speaks not only of his friends, but also of Snape and how close he lives to Lily, the fact that he's not running off to hex him really showed that he's more mature and I suppose ready to marry her.

I also love the detail you've given to James's thoughts, particularly about the war and how it relates to his life and his marriage, in particular the line about him not knowing whether he believes in the war, but rather he believes in her was just beautiful, but also sad as it really showed how confusing these times would have been for the characters who just happened to be in the middle of it all.

I absolutely love your writing style for this piece, you've managed to portray James in this entirely unique way where he clearly has more to think about than just getting or keeping Lily, or making sure his friends stay out of trouble. The fact that I noticed no grammatical or spelling errors is also great as well, and the story just flowed so beautifully from start to end, I almost wish it never ended. Well done on this lovely one-shot, I cannot wait to read your others!

~ In The Shadows I Dwell

Author's Response: Hello there! Thank you for coming by!

I'm definitely a Snily shipper as well, and so this was a challenge, but it's gotten a positive reception that I truly do appreciate. The Snape/Lily relationship can be so dark and dynamic, and it was sort of nice to explore the lighter side here, even with a grim backdrop.

I'm happy that you liked my portrayal of James. I wanted to show how much he cares for Lily, and how much he has changed as a result of that -- the old James probably would have rushed off and given Snape a few preliminary hexes just for being at home at the same time that Lily was at home. James's affection for Lily is simple on the surface, but it has caused him to explore some complicated feelings and truths about the world, and I admire him a little for facing those things in an attempt to win her heart.

That line about believing in Lily sparked the entire piece, and I do think that canon James probably did a lot of fighting because of her. I wanted to focus on that, because I think the Snily shipper in me can at least appreciate that a man who works that hard for Lily deserves to have her, in some sense at least.

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! :)

-Amanda


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