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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
This is an excellent prologue. The description is fantastic and everything flows so wonderfully, it's hard not to get caught up and lose track of time as one is reading. You've certainly opened up a lot of questions with this prologue and it only makes me want to continue to read, to find out what happens next.

Lorcan is perfect here, every bit an eager 10-year-old boy desperate for adventure. The little bit about the Tooth Fairy and wanting to make his brother jealous really reiterated how young he is. But despite him reconfirming his age to Snape, this prologue really reads from that of a 10 year old's POV. So well done.

I love how Lorcan hides behind the shrubbery, for five galleons, which seems like a lot for someone his age. So caught up in his excitement, I felt nothing but dread and anticipation with the line about how he didn't notice the window open. And I definitely NEVER saw it being Snape...wow, what a surprise!

This is just so good, and I hope I can continue reading soon. I'm desperate to find out what happens next, why Lily wanted to know if Snape was alive and how Snape is alive!

I wish I could have written you a longer review, but I'm not qute sure what else to say. Just...well done. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much. All reviews are good reviews no matter the length in my opinion :) I'm glad you liked the characterization of Lorcan. I was afraid I depicted him as too young. I wanted to find just the right age - old enough to venture out on his own but young enough not to realize what kind of trouble he might find himself in. Hopefully I wasn't too far off the mark. And I'm go glad Snape was a surprise. A few people said they guessed ahead of time, but I'm hoping that's partly because he's on the banner! Thanks again for the review.

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