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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
This was beautifully written. Weaving between past and present all the while telling us the story of Fred's death...it was perfect, and heartbreaking. The moments of Teddy's youth, where we see him so light-hearted and the leader of their little group contrasted to the broken man, who feels nothing but guilt and shame eating away at him. I adored it.

The last bits were the most heartbreaking. Just seeing Teddy struggle to get out of bed, to hear other people tell him it wasn't his fault when all he can do is blame himself...I just want to hug him. Then at the funeral, where he feels he doesn't belong and he should just leave...he's lost so much already and I hate that he thinks that this family isn't his own and gah, I don't even know.

I think my favorite line was about the name on the stone, how it's cursed - how George named his son after his fallen brother as means to remember him and then Teddy feels at fault for letting him die - a scar healed and then torn open.

I think you did an excellent job with Teddy's grief and blame. We really got a sense of how much he was adored by the younger Weasleys and so of course he feels at fault, because he was supposed to protect them and he failed. He failed and now Fred's dead.

I don't even have any other words for this, except that it's gorgeous and heartbreaking and I think one of the best written one-shots I've read in a long time. Well done.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much Missy! I am so proud of this story, mostly because so much of my heart is poured into it, and I'm so glad I managed to get across so many of the feelings I was trying to portray.

The transformation is significant, which is why I wanted to show how he became the broken man in stages. For me, it's more that the small part inside of him that grieves for his parents overwhelms him eventually, the first thing that started it all off. It's why he becomes so attached to the Weasleys, the closest thing he has to a family apart from his grandmother, and his need to protect them is built on the loss he felt. He wants to protect them so they never hurt as he has. So when he fails to do that, it's devastating.

It's exactly that - a reopened scar, for everyone. Not just Teddy's parents, but Fred I too. They have to bury another Fred Weasley and that is so hard for them.

Thank you so much for the stunning review!

Marina


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