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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
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I haven't read a lot of Founders era pieces, so I don't really have much to compare this to, but I found it gorgeous. It really made sense, that Rowena would keep Helena locked up like this. The last sentence made that point really prominent. Rowena, though she is the Founder of my own House, has always striken me as the kind of women who will get her way and who stays true to her word. You really portrayed that here, as well as the differences between Rowena and Helena. Lovely job.

My one small piece of constructive crit is that the time period wasn't really there for me. The language and such that you used was fairly modern (though you did manage to stay away from super modern expressions, so good job with that!) However, as this piece was more about the emotion, I think the language didn't do anything much, if at all, to detract from that :)

Great job!

-Naida

Author's Response: I never really read a lot of founders story before this easier which was why it was so fun (and hard) to write. Thank you so much! I portrayed the relationship between Rowena&Helena the way i thought it would be.

Yeah, I think I'm going to get a beta for this story. I haven't read any period drama stories in a while so my language defiantly isn't there. I did try.

Thank you for this amazing review!
Jaz


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