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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
I really liked this story just as much as the other one. I think you did a great job bringing out Remus's insecurities and holding true to his internal struggle with himself. I thought Dora was believable. I don't see why others wouldn't think so...she's not the fly off the handle sort of girl. She is as she said an "Auror" so she does have a lot tougher skin than most girls would have. I think her characterization was great. I could definatly see her running into the banister. =)

You did a terrific job with them and with this subject of having them deal with him leaving her while she's pregnant. It's not something that we know a lot about so it was great to have a chance to get to read something new and intriguing.

Oh and one little thing that I noticed too..

"Groping in the darkness, he pulled on shoes and socks, his mind frustratingly full of nothing put overused clichés and silly platitudes, words that had been written so many times over that they had lost all meaning"

I wasn't sure if you actually meant put or if you meant but. Thought I would point that out.

Keep up the great work!

-SR17

Author's Response: Thank you so much for doing it! I really appreciate it!

I am so glad you think Tonks was OK. I'll tell you now, you should have seen the first draft of her, looking back, it was absolutely dreadful. I much prefer Tonks here, and I'm so glad you think she is OK. It means that the re-writes have worked! So thanks for that! :)

I am glad you liked my take on this scene. I remember when I first read that Lupin left Tonks, when I was reading Deathly Hallows for the first time in the early hours of that brilliant July morning back in '07, that I was really angry and disappointed in him. But then I just got thinking as to why he would have done such a thing. He must have had what he thought was a very good reason. So that question has been at the back of my mind all this time, so I thought I'd write it! It's more to justify Lupin to myself than anything. He is my favourite character, but I didn't like him leaving Tonks. But, as with Ron leaving Harry and Hermione, it's not the leaving that matters, it's the fact he came back!

Thank you so much for pointing out that typo, yes, it should be 'but' - I'll change that pronto. Thank you for spotting it, it's so hard to pick up little typos like that! So cheers for that!

Thank you so much again for taking my request, really appreciate it! :)

Thanks again! ;)


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