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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Oh my...My heart was going a hundred miles an hour reading this. Every fiber of my being yelling inside at Caradoc to not take that final and fateful step. It was intense!

I would say out right that it kept me interested even though you know what's going to happen there is that intrigue to know about it. Your characterization was spot on and I even had my spine tingle when I read Bellatrix's line...goodness that woman gives me the creeps. =)

It's definatly original I have never read anything about Caradoc before where he is the main focus point.

Your descriptions were done very well. I could see everything as you described it. I especially liked how you said "And yet the lion inside of him was determined, so he quickened his pace, avoiding the murky puddles that littered the pavement despite the fact that it hadnít rained for days."
That was a brilliant line.

Pacing was done well. I didn't feel rushed or that it dragged in anyway either. Dialogue was excellent and went along well with your characterization. It flowed well to, but being as it is me I did notice a couple of things that I wanted to point out to you...

"Grinning at their apparent ease, he realised how much his job would be if he caught them by surprise."

This sentence was a bit confusing for me even when I read it out loud. Were you talking about how difficult his job would be if he had caught them by surprise? That is how I interpret it. If that's what you mean cool, I just wanted to clarify. I also noticed this...

"Caradoc Dearborn is assumed missing by Aurors after his abrupt disappearance in the late afternoon of January 12th. His disappearance follows the untimely murder of the Dorcas Meadows two days beforehand on the 10th of July."

You say that he went missing in January 2 days before Dorcas, but she went missing in July. Just thought I would point that out to you.

I am not being critical or trying to be a nitpick I just want to be honest at what I see and allow you the right to know.

"He sighed, for despite professor Binns emotionless tone, he had never particularly minded History of Magic; one should always learn from the past so as not to make the same mistakes in the future."

"Perhaps that was what the wizarding world needed; a good history lesson, one where they were shown the aftermath of war, shown that prejudice and pride never got the world anywhere."

Those two sentences right above speak volumes! I loved them very much because they're so relatable. If only life could follow these two sentences we would live in a wonderful world. Simply brilliant!!

This has got to be one of the most unique One-shots I've ever had the oppertunity to read. You took on a not so well known character and made it center around him in such a way that you almost feel like you've known him all along.

Keep up the great work! I LOVE your writing!! =)

-SR17

P.s. I am going to favorite this one too.

Author's Response: Ahh, the 2 days before thing is what happens when I don't re-read my editing :S I've fixed it up, and the edited version is in the queue to be validated. And the same with the other thing you picked up on; I need to edit my editing >_< And don't worry about trying to be harsh. You weren't at all, but even it you had been, I would have appreciated it. I love constructive feedback on my stories, otherwise I can't improve as a writer!

But I'm so glad you felt the suspense. I sort of suck at it, and thought that i'd totally failed here, but apparently I haven't and that makes me really, really happy :D

I'm thrilled that you like it, and that you find it unique. I think this might have just made my day. ^_^

Thank you so much for the review, and I'm so glad I could give you something enjoyable to read. I love your reviews, and will certainly re-request when I have the next chapter of Canis Major up (haha, i abuse your review thread >:D)

OH-MY-GOD-A-FAVORITE? :D :D :D :D :D *sqee*

- Adele :D


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