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Review:Beeezie says:
Hey! :)

I really, really enjoyed this piece. When I read the chapter summary, I was intrigued, and your execution of the concept was creative, original, and compelling. I loved the way that you structured the piece: each section flowed into the other beautifully. You started with a character that we're all familiar with and worked a mention of Gabrielle in - it was a passing reference, but it established a dynamic that helped me really get absorbed in Gabrielle's section. You continued to do that for Victoire and Dominique - it was subtle and absolutely expertly done.

The other thing that I liked was that in relatively few words, you really managed to get across a distinct personality for each of the four girls. I got a good sense of who each one was as a person and what their priorities were. I also felt like you characterised all of them well, both in general and in how they, specifically, found love. There are a lot of cliches and stereotypes that exist about the Delacours, but rather than buy into them, you gave all four girls a lot of depth.

In particular, I found the idea that Gabrielle had difficulty with her sister leaving France for England and not really looking back to be really insightful. It's not a point of view I'd ever considered before, but it's one that has a lot of potential, and I think that you tapped into it beautifully. I also loved the way you wrote Dominique - it can be hard to write from the pov of a child sometimes, but you did an amazing job with it. Dominique was quite believable, and for me, that section was the strongest of all of them (though they were all quite good).

Thank you for writing this. It's amazing. :)

Author's Response: Hi! Sorry for the delay, I haven't been around. It was so lovely to log on and see this, you can't imagine what it means.

I just don't know what to say. i loved this piece so much though wondered had i done the story in my head justice, i hope i did! I tried to do what i could, not having read a lot of delacour fics. I was obsessed with Gabrielle, im glad it showed! at one point i considered a short story starting immediately after this from her pov... maybe ill do it some day! Dom is my favourite, im so happy you liked her!

thank you so so much for this! :D

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