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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Wow. This is breathtakingly beautiful. I have never seen anything like it.

You gave us a lot of details to work with and I am truly overwhelmed by how good you manipulated them. Usually, when authors use a lot of detail everything gets blurry -the total opposite of their goal- and very hard to understand.

Fortunately, you manage not to do this and I understood what's happening quickly, but no so quickly; it took me some few sentences to work out the scene is at a funeral and a few more to work out that the funeral is Lucy's. But I think its just the way you didn't mention who died and what was really happening from the start and instead put all the more important information in the middle of the story!

(Also, whether done purposely or not, it's a really great tactic! Reveal the key informations somewhere in the middle of the story and leave the reader nowhere to go but the end.)

I am just so... surprised, shocked, and amazed on how this whole chapter turned out. So beautifully heart-breaking. :(

Overall, I think this is going to be a really great and interesting story and I would love to keep reviewing it (if you want me to! :P)

This is awesome!
CloakAuror9 xx

Author's Response: Hi! i'm so sorry for the late response! I feel terrible but you're thoughts are very appreciated!

Anyway, thank you for your compliments and i'm a little taken aback by them to be honest. I hadn't really expected such a lovely review as this story is just, i don't know, it's going to be a bit depressing. I'm pleased that you think the detail is spot on, that really is such a huge compliment and i'm blushing a bit at your comments. I definitely didn't want it to be known who it was or who was even speaking till closer to the end. It just felt right because she's just so confused at the whole situation. I'm glad it wasn't a turn off or annoying.

Thank you so much for your lovely review and yes, i'll definitely come back for a review when the next chapter is out :D


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