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Review:watchoutfornargles says:
Hi :) The sentence "Teddy and she were best friends." should be "She and Teddy were best friends." This sentence "They had been since the past three years; since the day he’d come and confessed to her that he still liked Victoire, even after dating her back in the Hogwarts days for a brief period and then she having broken up with him, and that he needed her help to woo her sister once again. " needs to be reworded. It's kind of a run on, so what I suggest is changing it to "They had been since the past three years; since the day he’d come and confessed to her that he still liked Victoire, even after dating her back in the Hogwarts days for a brief period. She had broken up with him, and he needed her help to woo Victoire once again." This (I love you Dom, you know I do, it's just that I love her too, and unfortunately I think I love her more than I love you. ) is also a kind of run on, so I think you should change it to "I love you Dom, you know I do, it's just that I love her too, and unfortunately I think I love her more."
On a non-editorial note, I really like this story. :)

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much for reading & reviewing, and giving me all the little pointers to improve my story. I will do an edit soon :) And I am glad you liked it!

Thanks!

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