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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again.

First off, I'm sorry that it took me so long to get to this. Work and life and trying to pull together the next chapter of my own story have been sucking up all of my time. But I made it, at last. And I'm glad I did.

Poor Pansy. If I'm following the passage of time correctly, a period of years has passed between her trip to Diagon Alley and Draco's visit. Such a long time to live in isolation. The poor dear is _so_ unwell. It's no wonder that she's going crazy.

The way you set up her attempts to communicate with Draco were nicely aligned with the final two books. It seemed quite apparent that Draco was losing interest in Pansy during HPB and had lost interest by the time we see him in DH. But she did not or could not realize that.

The conversation where he tries to let her down gently -- sort of. I guess not really. -- was perfectly in character for Draco. He was distant, overly formal and awkward. He plainly wanted to be somewhere else. The only thing he didn't do was insult her, but perhaps he's gotten a little too mature to do that. The whole scene worked perfectly.

And Pansy's drunken pity party was beautifully done. You brought back her tendency to imagine companions when she's alone and mixed it very well with the type of self-delusion that drunk people experience. I absolutely loved the sentence that compares the wine in the glass with Pansy's situation. That was inspired!

So I did notice three things that you might want to take another look at:

- "She wanted to bit her tongue in half when her mind whispered that he wasnít so great if he was able to be beaten by a seventeen-year-old, muggle-raised boy. " - bite

- "Her mother left her own, preferring to arrange visits to with Pansyís father in Azkaban and visit craft stores." - "left her alone"? Also, I think you need to strike "to" or "with" before "Pansy's father".

- "It had crept up behind her and bite into the strongest thing she had ever felt, killing it instantly." - bit

Other than that, your writing was excellent, as always.

Can't wait to see how her visit to Azkaban goes!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing and it's no problem about the wait- it's great that you took the time to review at all!

Yes, you're right- there has been a longer period of time between her visit to Diagon Alley and Draco's visit. I've tried to accurately write her mental state based on this period of isolation, as human beings aren't meant to be alone.

I'm glad that you thought Pansy's attempts at communication were nicely done- as you mentioned before, it was clear that Draco was losing interest in Pansy. Unfortunately, Pansy didn't realize it... and continued to think they were a couple. As well, I'm very glad that you liked Draco's characterization and that scene in general. I found it easy to write- the characters seemed to know exactly what they wanted to say!

I'm very glad that you liked Pansy's pity party- it was the perfect opportunity to include her imaginary companions and I had great fun writing the more unusual description.

Thanks for pointing out those mistakes- they should be fixed shortly! And hopefully the next chapter will be out soon- I've been very busy the past few weeks but I'm heading into a lull. However, the Azkaban will certainly be in the next chapter!


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