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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey! This is apocalypse, here with your review! Sorry for being so late; I've been crazy busy this week!

Anyway, I'd like to start off by mentioning how much I appreciate that you finally introduced Hermione into the whole family picture. =) I know I have been mentioning how your chapters seemed incomplete with everyone except Hermione, your main character's mom, in the picture. But now that she's here everything's in place. =) Good job. However throughout the chapter, I got this weird feeling that there might be a chance of you not liking Hermione's character that much. Correct me if I'm not wrong, but as compared to all the other characters you've written her character as a very dry person and its as if you wrote it because you HAD to and not because you WANTED to; am I making any sense? I mean I could totally see that you had super fun writing about all the other characters; James, Albus, Hugo and so on. But the fun factor seemed to be missing in Hermione's character which did not make her seem as intriguing as she should've been. No offence though; just curiosity. =)

Moving on, I loved Hugo and Rose's scenes. They were hilarious and realistic at the same time. One expects this kind of behavior; ongoing taunts, arguments, silly threats from the siblings =P I enjoyed their conversation, a lot.=) Similarly, I loved the atmosphere for the scenario where all the cousins meet up at Rose's new place. However, the part where they sort of jump over each other might have gotten a bit overboard. I mean aren't they all a bit mature for an action) like that? This goes just for the jumping part; the rest was VERY entertaining, the Auror taunts and the jinxing. =) Well done!

Also when Scorpious comes to visit Rose, you made him carry '..bouquet of wild flowers in one hand, and a nice bottle of champagne in the other..' And then the part where you mentioned, 'Scorpius said hurriedly, giving her the presents and a kiss on the cheek.. I went all 'Woah did I miss something?' my point being, these presents and kiss from a Malfoy to a Weasley? A bit too fast don't you think? As I mentioned in one of my previous reviews, I'd like you to brief us with more details regarding their past or current relationship before you start progressing towards their future. That way it will be more fun and interesting to read about them. Right now it's all sort of confusing. I hope I am making my point clear. =)

I think that that's it from me at the moment. It was a very fun and entertaining chapter and I loved reading your writing! I think you're doing a good job with the story; all you need to do is get a better hang of the slight details you miss here and there. Apart from that, it's all great! =) I hope this review helps you. Until next time, Good Luck and Happy Writing! =D

Author's Response: You caught me *bashful face*, I think there are 3 excuses for why I probably wrote her like that, lol. 1. I want Rose to be a grown up, so maybe she wouldn't be around her parents (mother) all the time, especially since Hermione has her own very important job. 2. There are a ton of characters in the Next-Gen Weasley brood to give personalities to, that aren't the ones we already know. 3. Writing Hermione scares me. Partly because I dislike her greatly and even though she's my MC's mom, she is a tough cookie to get correct. Lol but I do get that she should be there.
I loved writing the cousin and sibling stuff! Though I admit I may go a little overboard, I should reign it in a bit. Still they are cousins who don't see eachother often and are used to roughhousing... idk we'll see. ;)
And I think with Scorpius, it was more meant as a gentlemanly gesture and a house warming gift than romantic (romance will happen, but later, way later). He's known Rose since she was 11, because he and James decided to be friends when she and Albus started at Hogwarts. But I totally get ya, I had written some prequel one-shots to this, but didn't really continue the explanations in this story. oopsy. Lol
Anywho, I'm really glad you reviewed this because well... your reviews are incredibly exactly what I need. Very helpful, and not coddling and perfect, yet again. I will get to editing! Thank you so much as always!!! :D


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