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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
This was amazing. I loved all the descriptiveness that you put into this chapter. It really made it pop all the more.

The flow of your chapter was great and you didn't skip a beat connecting it from the prologue.

Your characterization of Ariana is beautifully done in this chapter. She is still internally struggling with her death. She has this unexplainable depth and beauty to her that takes you beyond the fact that she has passed. You can feel her anguish towards Aberforth and the others that she can't help.

It's almost like you took a paint brush and a sensitive topic (death) and painted a beautiful masterpiece with tones of darkness. It's very breath taking and very tricky, but you pull it off with such ease.

Keep up the great writing! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the descriptiveness! I'm so glad the flow between chapters was good, it's always a hazard when you update slowly that the chapters don't necessarily read well together, but it's good to know that you didn't have an issue with it :)

I thought long and hard about Ariana's character and I think it helps that I've been writing her in another story since 2008 - I've got to know her pretty well and that helps so much when I come to write. Overall, what happened to her was unfair and there's this sense of injustice she feels because she was taken too soon.

When I write I tend to imagine painting a bit, is that weird? The main thing I want to get across is that although the in between world is beautiful, natural and calm, there's a turmoil that Ariana has that gives it its darkness. All is not as it seems.

Thank you so much for the wonderful review!

Marina


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