Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:Tonks1247 says:
I can never help but feel bad for Ginny, at least a little bit. She’s the only girl out of an all-boys family, besides her mum, and she’s the youngest. While I’m not even close to being in that predicament [4 sisters and a middle child], I can only imagine that it really sucks! I mean, her brothers never let her play with them and they are always teasing her. It’s evident in the books and in this chapter. She’s just never allowed. But she’s still stubborn as heck to change that, which I really like.

I also adore her ingenuity. She was faced with a problem, talked with her mum (though not about the exact issue on hand), and figured something out to help her. If I were put in that situation, I don’t think I would have ever thought of George’s toy broom, nor of the teddy bear hidden in my parents closest. I just don’t have the logic for that, like Ginny so clearly does.

Also, I love her struggle to get the broom in the air. She’s so determined to get into the air that she tries everything she can think of, only to end up in the pond. Which made me laugh, because the second the idea popped in her head, I knew she would end up in the pond. Just because it was too good not to happen! I also love how, after Molly helped her out, she questioned her about Mr Stuffing and Ron freaked. I was laughing out loud at the image of Ron hiding behind George as if his bear was about to attack him as a spider again. It was just too hilarious. And probably gave the twins a reason to mock him for the rest of the day!

There were two nitpicky things I caught, that I’m not sure whether a correction is actually needed or not [I hate losing an hour…my brain rejects the idea]:

“There was a comforting sort of smell in here – it was too clean, but there was a pleasant combination of her mother's favourite lavender soap and her father's aftershave. But, now allowing herself to be distracted by this, Ginny forged on, heading for the wardrobe tucked in the corner.” ~The first thing is the use of the word ‘here’ in the first sentence. I was thinking it may work better, sound like the right tense and the right person with the word ‘there,’ but I don’t know for certain. The other thing was in that second sentence, I believe you want that second word to be ‘not’ instead of ‘now.’

Other than those two things, I really did enjoy this chapter! It really was fantastically written and Ginny’s character, I feel, was done expertly in cannon!

~Grimmerz

Author's Response: I feel a little bad for Ginny, but at the same time, I think she's definitely a girl who can hold her own. :D She's got to be rather strong, with all those boys -- and while as a rule I really don't care for her character all that much, I've got to admit that I've got a grudging amount of respect for her.

You're rather good at predicting how these chapters will go! :P It's largely slapstick, granted, so the action is predictable to some degree. I still love it. :D

Ahh, your corrections. ♥ Thank you for catching those -- I can always use the editing help! One can only find so many mistakes in one's own story, I reckon. Thanks so much for this review -- you're so fabulous! I really appreciate your taking the time to tell me your opinions, and am so grateful for them!

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Submit Report:  





All stories remain the property of their authors and must not be copied in any form without their consent. This is an unofficial, not for profit site, and is in no way connected with J.K. Rowling, Scholastic Books or Bloomsbury Publishing or Warner Bros. It is not endorsed by any of the aforementioned parties. Rights to characters and their images is neither claimed nor implied. The use of photographs and/or the likeness of any person contained herein does not imply endorsement of any kind. Any depictions were obtained through publically available sources and therefore fall under fair use. Although we may provide links to other websites, we are not responsible for any material at these sites. You acknowledge that you link to these other websites at your own risk. All original administrative content is copyright of the site owner and must not be copied in any form (electronic or otherwise) without the prior consent of the siteowner. ©2000-2012 Fanfictionworld.net

[terms of service] [report abuse] [privacy policy] [site credits]
 
 

navigation

home

search HPFF
read stories
write stories
login/register
get help
site links
forums
podcasts
Terms of Service
Site Rules
contact us

  
 
 

categories & genres

Genre:
- crossover
- drama
- fluff
- general
- horror/dark
- humor
- mystery
- romance
- action/adventure
- angst
- au
- young adult

Popular Pairings:
- harry/ginny
- ron/hermione
- james/lily
- draco/hermione
- more...

Format:
- one-shot
- short story
- novella
- novel
- short story collection
- songfic

  
 
 

quick links

my account
ToS
random story
site rules
help
merchandise


  
 
 

fanfictionworld.net