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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
"The number of spells required for so drastic an alteration in appearance would be far more than this poor author has time to list."

That has to be one of my favorite lines in all of fanfiction. It's absolutely hilarious, witty, and just plain brilliant.

Now that I've gotten that out of the way, hello once more! I really liked Lily's point of view in this chapter. You were right in saying that it helped to develop her character. It added more to the shallow, snobbish girl we saw in the last chapter, and she almost sounded insecure in this. She still sounded rather shallow and snobbish, but you added a layer underneath that showed why. She definitely is the "classic girl" of the time period, as her only desire seems to be finding a husband. She's so concerned with social standards, in fact, that she acts as the perfect foil for Rose. The two of them contrast sharply with one another, and you've done a great job of making those characteristics stand out.

Oh, and I think Albus has just become my new favorite character. Ahh, he was so lovely and out of the norm that I couldn't help but love him. So I'm hoping to see more of him in the next chapters.

I'm really excited to see where Rose has run off to, as well as to see more of Scorpius!

-Naida

Author's Response: That line! I'm really glad that you liked it! :D

It's great that seeing things from Lily's perspective helped fill out her character. She is very insecure and feels the need to prove herself, though unlike Rose, she believes that she can only do so on society's terms rather than her own. She puts on a lot to make herself one of those society ladies, but it only shows how shallow they are because it's a costume that doesn't quite fit her.

lol, Albus. I thought I might have gone overboard with him and especially with his appearance, but it works for this story in its own way. XD He's definitely not like other versions of Albus that I've seen in fanfiction, and I'll be pleased to include more of him in future chapters - he's just so crazy and fun to write!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story - I really appreciate it! :D


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