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Review:ginerva_molly_weasley says:
What a very different yet, amazing story!

As this was written as a missing moment I think you've made it entirely believable with Petunia's emotions all over the place and her worrying about Vernon's reactions to the letter and picture that she had.

The resent she feels to Harry in a way seems very misdirected and I don't know whether you wanted to show that or not. It was very interesting to read how she said she wish she'd never have met him but at the same time it was necessary for them to meet because of the blood protection and because of Voldermort. It was also interesting to see that she blamed Snape for taking Lily from her because as readers of the canon we know that whether she had met or not she still would have gotten her letter from Hogwarts.

Vernon does make me laugh with that presumption of his that a simple burglar alarm would be enough to keep Lord Voldermort out. As we know just a simple freezing charm does the trick!

The ending is very good as it shows that Dumbledore is aware of her reservations and resentfulness towards her nephew. I very much like this piece!

SHPFFO!

Author's Response: You bring up some intriguing points in your review!

I'll talk about the Snape thing first. I decided to have her blame Snape for losing Lily because she wants a person (rather than an abstract concept like magic) to blame. Also, he was the first person Lily encountered who know what she was and even really seemed to encourage it. I personally see that as a potential turning point for Lily's relationship with her sister, so for the purpose of this story, I make it a moment when Petunia feels the loss of her sister and friend.

Perhaps her resentment of Harry is misdirected. It certainly is rather childish on one level. On another, she feels she's had this child dumped on her, and and as a result, her family is in more danger. She's not that mature about handling it, though. I wrote it from a standpoint that she never completely got over her "rejection" from Hogwarts . . . how at one point she wanted to go so badly but couldn't.

I also wanted to emphasize Harry's eyes in this story, since in the books such a big deal is made of how he has his mother's eyes. I figure that's something Petunia couldn't fail to notice, so seeing Harry must also be a reminder of Lily . . . and when she thinks of Lily, she thinks of not only the loss (which is largely her own fault), but also of the happy times they had as children.

In this story, I have Petunia on the one hand wanting to have cut magic out of her life, but on the other hand not quite wanting to let go of it. Harry is a big part of that for her. If not for him, she could have forgotten about it, but now he serves as a last tie--but also brings more danger.

Maybe that is too confusing to all convey in a one-shot!

Vernon is so easy to use to humorous effect, because he's quite a ridiculous figure to begin with!

Thank you very much for the review. It was a pleasant surprise! :D

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