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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Hello! I was in the mood to do some reading and reviewing tonight and I was really in the mood to read more of this story. So here I am! :)

It always my day when I get the opportunity to read another chapter of this story. You pick some of the most interesting moments I would have never even thought of to write about. And this moment though I’m not sure is directly mentioned in the book, sounds exactly like something that would have happened in the Weasley household.

First there was Fred putting the marmalade on Charlie’s chair…Just hilarious. It started with just innocently playing with the jar of marmalade, something that I’m sure a lot of younger kids do, and then the evil idea just bloomed. And to a four year old? That’s a pretty good on-the-spot prank idea, which he pulled off just greatly. I know I would have started laughing before Charlie even sat down…

I also love your description of Charlie sitting down and the squelch noise. It was just great! I could totally picture it in my head and hear the noise as Charlie sat down. It was rather gross…I also love Fred, at four, already knowing he has to duck and hide under the table to hide from his brother. Such a smart little boy. And Molly yelling at them was funny. I love Percy being offended because he got dragged into by just being at the table at the time. Sounds just about right!

One thing I did notice from around that part of the story:

“He crawled out fully now and stood up, brushing dirt and dust from the knees of his pajamas. George followed suit, choosing to crawl under the table as well in case Charlie was prepared to make another swing for one of his brothers.” ~I think it’s just the wording with the second sentence that makes it mildly confusing. I get what you were trying to say, but this sentence makes it sound as if George is crawling under the table instead of crawling out of under the table. Maybe changing choosing to ‘as he had chosen’?

The next thing I adored was Fred collecting the gnomes in his pocket. With his character, it just seemed natural for Fred to try to save the gnomes from having to be spun and thrown out of their homes. He’s such a caring little boy. But him also being a little boy, it was no surprise he ended up forgetting about them. Although he had a good idea, hiding them in the wardrobe and all. It would have been my first pick of places to hide gnomes ;)

The last thing I want to comment on, before sharing my favorite line and being done, would be Molly’s little bit at the end of the chapter. I really loved how you gave Molly an opportunity to reflect back on her son’s action. It really is sweet because you really bring across the unconditional love mothers have for their sons. And it really is not something I see too often.

And now, my favorite line:

“It was an odd sensation, Fred thought absently, to have a gnome kicking about inside one’s pocket.” ~Hehehehe. I love Fred. Just flat out love him!

Absolutely amazing! I loved it! And I’m headed off for the next chapter :)

~Grimmerz

Author's Response: Oh my gosh, it completely made my day to see you'd dropped by! :3 Your reviews just sort of make me flail around and drop a lot of things (and I do that normally!), and I cannot even begin to tell you my appreciation.

Fred's got such spirit in this chapter -- all the Weasley kids sort of do, and I think that's why I enjoy writing about little children so much. ;) Fred and George really were born to do pranks!

As for what you pointed out -- I think it's just a bit of confusion. :3 George wasn't under the table with Fred, but he left the table by going under it, as Fred had, just to avoid Charlie's wrath.

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a long and, quite honestly, thoroughly amazing review. It means SO MUCH to me that you did -- I really do appreciate it! ♥ You're amazing!


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