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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
It's always interesting to get another character's perspective of how they viewed the Battle of Hogwarts, especially of a character who left Hogwarts before the battle started. I've always somewhat been curious of Pansy because we knew so little about her, yet she always seemed to show up in the books with a gaggle of other Slytherin students in Harry's year. And we know she had a thing with Draco, of course.

What I liked about this chapter was how you described what Pansy was seeing as they walked across the grounds to Hogsmeade, as well as what she was looking for (her father/other signs of Death Eaters waiting in the Forbidden Forest) and feeling (she was worried about Draco since he was still somewhere in the castle) as she walked. It was excellent imaginary and I felt like I was put into Pansy's shoes the whole time as she experienced it.

As for critique, I noticed a few words here and there that seemed to be missing. For instance, at the start of the chapter you typed "She had thought that the Ravenclaws more intelligent than they were." It would flow a lot better if you had typed "...thought the 'to be' Ravenclaws more intelligent..." And there were a couple other spots that appeared to be missing a word or two, but nothing too stand-out as I've already lost where they were. Over all, excellent story so far and I'm definitely intrigued enough to continue reading to see what else Pansy experiences. :) 9/10

onestop_hpfan18, Hufflepuff
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Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I also find it very interesting to see the other possible perspectives, especially if they challenge your view of things. Pansy provided an excellent opportunity to explore this, especially since she's a relatively minor character.

I'm glad that you liked the imagery in this chapter as I was really trying to create the appropriate mood.

I'll go back and reread the chapter- thanks for pointing out the missing words. Hopefully you will continue reading!


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