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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Ah, Susan, I loved this chapter, especially the Austen scene at the end because it fit in so well with the indifference between the Malfoys and the Weasleys in the Wizarding World; it really shows the longstanding hatred and feud that the two families have between them, and I think you went about executing it quite well in really showing both Rowling's and Austen's worlds in crossing each path with the other.

There were a couple typos I picked up on while reading. The first was where Rose was dancing with Teddy and telling him of how Mr. Malfoy had interrupted her and Lily's dance practice; you wrote 'those' instead of 'that', unless you meant to pluralize 'moment' rather than keeping it singular like you did. I can't seem to find it, but a little ways down, you typed "As Mr. Lupin lead her into the dance..." where it would flow better with '...led her into the dance...". Aside from those two typing errors, I picked up on nothing else. I really did enjoy this chapter, it was filled with activity and intrigue, especially since Rose is making no move to start conversation with anyone she does not know.

I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter when you post it. I'm sure it'll be excellent. :) 10/10

onestop_hpfan18, Hufflepuff
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Author's Response: Thank you so much, Leslie! I'm really glad to hear that this chapter worked out. This story is at once a joy and a challenge to write, all of the detail it requires often overwhelming my imagination (too often I have to keep myself from describing the whole history of the Potterverse within this alternate universe - it's maddening!). ^_^

That scene from Austen suits this story perfectly for the reasons that you outlined. Unlike some other scenes in P&P, that particular one really emphasizes negative feeling, something that Rose and Scorpius share between them more so than Lizzie and Darcy - the relationships between their families are entirely different and very involved. It definitely changes the dynamic of that scene.

I've fixed those typos now. Thank you for pointing them out! I've been having a lot of trouble with "lead" vs. "led", so I'm glad to have feedback on which one is better to use. :D


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