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Review:CambAngst says:
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Wow. Neville is so hard on himself. I think it's perfectly in character for him at this age, but it's still a little hard to read. When I think about the canon characters, my automatic reflex is to think of them as they were in HBP or DH. It really takes me back to remember what a shy, awkward, introverted boy Neville was in the first book.

I think you nailed all of Neville's dialog. It sounded just like him. The fear and reverence he has for his grandmother, the slight awkwardness.

And then there's the letter, itself. Poor, poor Neville. It's kind of heart-breaking to read, but also oddly uplifting. This poor kid who feels like he's a failure and always will be turns out to be one of the heroes of the war. It really goes to show how people can change.

I'm going to go ahead and read and review chapter 2, as though I could have helped myself! Well done!

Author's Response: Hello and thank you a billion times for this nice review! Just hearing that you think I wrote Neville in-character is an amazing comment and means the world to me.
It was fun to go back and take a lot at how bumbly and, almost pathetic, this boy was at first. It was impossible to imagine Neville would end up a hero and thats what appealed to me here; surely, if us, readers, didn't see it coming, then the boy himself hasn't!

I tried making his relationship with his Gran true to cannon; I don't think she was a mean person per se, it's more that she was a bit disapointed at how her grandson turned out, compared to how his father was. And we all know that the people that aren't present are always idealized...

Glad you liked it, even if it was short, and I can't wait to see what you thought of chapter 2 as well; thanks for reading"

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