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Review:academica says:
Hey there! Here from review tag :)

This is a cute idea for a story, and I like the introduction. You've got a lot of good description in there, especially the part about the bacon. I could almost smell it! I liked the ending to this chapter, too, because I think it would be just like Hermione to rush off to work when she's frustrated.

I'm not entirely sure about the characterization. I can sort of understand Hermione's frustration, but I do feel like she overreacted a little bit. I'm also not a big fan of the tattoo idea, though again, I can see where it might fit in here. Also, the flow is a little dodgy, mostly because you've got some fragmented sentences and passive tense sentences in there. These are things that a beta could potentially help you with.

Nice work! This is an interesting start to an intriguing plot.

academica

Author's Response: Hey, thank you for the review!

I'm glad you liked the introduction. I tried to make this as believable as possible and the description was all part of setting the scene. The ending came pretty naturally as most women try to hide the fact they are mad by rushing off so even though it was her day off, she'd want to get out of the house!

The characterization of Hermione will be explained as she goes through because she is just tired of her life with Ron at the moment. The romance is lacking and they are getting over the honeymoon stage which was mainly what was holding them together. As they're only 21, they're still discovering things about themselves so when Hermione has the day off and tries to be romantic and then he's just not, she is very annoyed with him. The tattoo is also very very important in the latter chapters and although it seems very un-hermioneish now, I think since the war she will have changed but she will also want a reminder of what she managed to overcome.

I am looking into getting a beta for this! Thanks again!


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