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Review:AnnaKay says:
You're details are fantastic in this chapter! You capture the feel, look and smell of many things. I think details are hard to do, and I think you did them great.

For Hermione, I think there are a few things that are a bit off. I think that you have her emotions down very well, but some of her actions in the first half of the chapter just seem a little bit off to me. Not Hermione-ish. It might be me personally, but I don't get the feeling that she would skip, or things like that. It's not that big of a deal, but I think just some of her actions don't match her.

But you did her emotions great through the whole chapter, and towards the second half of the chapter I felt that Hermione's actions also matched well. I think that you did Ron great! He is all himself and I think you did wonderul!

Great chapter.

Author's Response: Hey thank you for getting to my review so quickly!

I'm glad you liked how much description I put in. In a way I thought there was a little too much but I've had a lot of good feedback.

Hermione for me is a really difficult character to write and she doesn't come naturally at all. I tried to make it quite fluffy and whilst it was a little un-Hermione ish, I feel she will have changed quite a lot since the war as she finally gets a change to be happy.

I'm glad you thought the end of the chapter was better. I shall aim for that more often now!

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