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Review:long_live_luna_bellatrix says:
I already knew you wrote Luna particularly well, but this just confirmed it even more. There are so many bits and pieces to Luna that are hard to put together sometimes: her lack of attention to things she finds unimportant, her eagerness about those things she does like, her ability to make the sort of assumptions that others can't, her easy acceptance of oddities, her loyalty to her friends... I think I could continue listing, but you get the idea. :P I saw a little of all of those and more here, which was delightful. As someone who isn't a big fan of small talk, I often come out with half a sentence then backtrack to what I was actually going to say, so I could relate to Rolf here and was pleased that Luna could too.

I also liked Charlie's appearance. It's always nice to see a friendly face, and you did well to have him spur on Rolf's curiosity about Luna and her connections. It was interesting to see Luna as the war veteran in Rolf's eyes, and Harry the celebrity, as those aren't the first words that pop to my mind when describing those two. However, both are accurate, and it put a bit of a twist on how I saw them here.

And I especially adored the last line. I love seeing those sort of connections that really bring two halves of the story together and show how they're both separate and entirely relevant. Pressing the snooze button on the alarm clocks lined up perfectly with Rolf's reluctance to ask her out. If you press snooze, the alarm clock inevitably goes off, and I was never too worried about Rolf and Luna's relationship. Obviously there was a question, otherwise there wouldn't have been any tension in the story, but the snooze theme still worked.

The only part I felt was a little lacking was when Rolf exited the last lecture and wondered if he'd ever see Luna again. If he already had as strong feelings for her as you suggested, and knew it was the last lecture, I would have expected at least a half-hearted plan to speak to her afterward. Then, when she didn't show up, some real disappointment that his big, final chance was crushed. The story was fine without it, of course, but I was under the impression he really wanted to see her more and I was left wondering a bit.

Anyway, it was a lovely story. Luna's characterization was certainly the highlight for me, although the whole thing was really sweet. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks for such a lovely long review! Wow! The compliment on how I write luna is really amazing! And I'm glad you could relate to Rolf as well.

Hehe, Charlie. Sometimes I just can't resist adding him somewhere. I think he's made a couple of other short guest appearances in my stories, apart from where he has a more major role. I just can't resist him.

Um, I've got to admit that I never thought about the snooze theme as that big in the story. It just seemed like a funny name and from the point when they finally got together, which is why I gave the story that title. Also in the story it sort of served as something light that helped them to talk in the end and that made them or Rolf not get too scared at the starting to date and moving forward in the relationship thought. In this story he is sort of more a man of action and straight forward things, who might be a bit romantic but finds that bit scary at the same time. So a good laugh helps him out and sort of shows that it will all be all right from here on. But yeah, after that rambling, what I'm saying is that I didn't really realise that there was a sort of snooze in how he was slow to ask her out, but you're right in that it fits. :)

You're probably right about the fact that something could be added to the story when Rolf is not sure if he will se Luna again. I should read that bit again to see what I thought. But I think that in my head it was something like that he was a bit distracted at the moment and didn't quite get as far as a plan. Or maybe he just somewhere in his mind thought that he will come across her in the fairly small wizarding circles. Anyway, if that's just in my head it doesn't help the story, does it?

I really appreciate the review and the advice. Thank you! :)


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