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Review:Flavia says:
A good second chapter, it flowed really well and you introduced the characters really naturally without it sounding like you were just listing off their characteristics (which you unfortunately see in fanfics a lot), so that was great. I like that each character is different but not in a stereotypical way, you haven't just gone for the stock standard 'funny one' 'pretty one' 'clever one' etc, which makes your characters so much more believeable.

I personally LOVE that you've put all of these girls in Hufflepuff. So often people think that all Gryffies have to be super brave and adventurous, all Ravenclaws have to be geeks, all 'puffs are boring and shy etc. But if you look at the canon characters, there are so many examples of characters who don't fit the mould: Neville Longbottom, Cedric Diggory, even Hermione! Good on you for making 'puffs who like to pull pranks and make trouble, or who enjoy reading...once again I think it adds realism.

There are still a few grammar, spelling issues etc, which could be sorted with a good edit, and occasionally the details are a bit hard to follow. do you have a beta? It might be handy to have someone else look over things for you. Just a thought.

Overall, I'm really enjoying the story and I still want to read more! Sorry about such a long, rambly review! I can't help myself :)

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