I always like reading new stories (I guess thatís why I opened up a Review Thread!) and this one looks to be an interesting one! I like seeing how a writer takes someone who basically knows nothing of a very established past and gets them reoriented. Usually we get a full restoration of memory, but Iím interested in what you are going to do with this. Plus we have a minor NextGen character being written about! I love that! I can get sick of the whole Scorpius/Rose, Teddy/Victoire, James/OC mix! :)
LOL, donít follow the light Molly!
ďIím not supposed to help you,Ē Bessie whispered conspiratorially, ďBut itís Draco Malfoy!Ē - Holy Shamoly?!? What?!? Iíve actually never seen that! What are you doing to the wizarding world! (look at me, Iím Bessie-ing it with my exclaims). I canít even fathom that what with his family history! Wait, unless this is some alternate reality where evil rulesÖ
Poor Molly. Whoever she is, she has a massive family, and they all look insane. - I LOVE MOLLY. Iím sorry I just had to come out and say it. Her dryness tickles me, absolutely tickles me to death. I am GREATLY amused.
There was a bit of a confusing part here with Molly remembering the guy she was laughing with and then James walking in. I thought she was still trying to remember the guy she was with and then she said that it was James and then I was like ďEw. Her cousin?Ē and then I remembered ToS and realized it couldnít be that. So yeah, as you can see, I was thrown for a millisecond there.
The flow is quite nice, though I wouldíve liked to see more of the hospital interactions. You briefly touch upon it but I think there could be more gotten out of the moments there. I do find it believable just based off the data youíve given so far. Iím in a total mystery about Mollyís accident though!
All in all, this was a wonderful story to start reading. In fact, when I get a chance, Iím just going to go ahead and finish it since itís short. You write Molly incredibly well. Even though she doesnít know who she is, sheís got at least her own self sorted out a bit: dry, funny and just a little sarcastic but a very practical attitude. Her accident is very mysterious and is a great pull to me wanting to read further. The family interactions, especially James, was done perfectly in my mind. I like how you have Molly comparing his attitude towards her as old-Molly/new-Molly and how I can see that thereís a distinct difference in his attitude. Anyway, Iím rambling, but as you can see, I did really like this and I hope to read more later on today!
Author's Response: I actually love you.
Yay for minor Next Gen! I felt like I was ignoring Molly in my NextGen novel, so when I entered this challenge I wanted to give her a voice! By taking away her memory. my logic is rubbish.
Erm, follow the light... yeah. Cliches, I LOVE THEM.
I wish I hadn't made Draco MoM now, because it really isn't important. I just wanted someone canon for it, and he popped into my head. Sorry! Don't worry though, in my head he's a lovely guy.
Molly's dryness... Yeah. :D I was trying to see what I could do with her memory loss, and I thought bluntness and being sarcastic would come to the top.
EW. Molly and James? EW. EW. EW. I'll try and make that clearer. EW.
I'm glad my mystery is mysterious.
Thanks! YOU'RE GOING TO CARRY ON READING? I LOVE YOU. *cough* I've already said that, haven't I?
More family in the next chapter for you then, and I'm very glad you like Molly as a character.
THANK YOU! √Ę¬ô¬•