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Review:The Last Marauder says:
Well, I was slightly surprised when I saw that you had a chapter two in this.. because when I added it to my favourites it was only a one-shot. So I was surprised. I loved your one-shot so much, I really did. I am very happy you are fleshing it out and making it longer; but I think since you are doing that you should fill in a few holes a bit more. I mean we go straight from Sirius's escape to him in Flitwick's office, why not do a few chapters in between, about Sirius seeing Harry in Privet Drive, about Sirius sneaking into Hogwarts, befriending Crookshanks and seeing Remus again after all this time? I think that will really make this story very interesting. I mean if you are going to expand it out why not go the whole hog and do that? Add in a few more moments so it seems a little less fragmented? It's just a suggestion, you don't have to listen to me at all. I just really loved your one-shot and I think that if you are expanding it you really should go for it, it's your story take it and just run, you have the writing ability,and you come up with very clever/interesting/enjoyable story-lines, I know you can do it! Fill in more holes, show us more sides to Sirius we didn't get to see in the books! It's your story, just take it and really go for it, give the reader everything you've got and I just know that whoever is reading it will really enjoy it. You have it in you! :)

Anyway, all that aside, as with the original one-shot I LOVE how you characterised Sirius here, it's spot on and just great to read, well done. :)

Author's Response: wow, you are so sweet!
I probably will flesh it out as you said, but first I'd like to just break it up a little so people aren't too overwhelmed with how big it was. 7000 words was waay too big for a one shot, but yeah, since I'm breaking it down anyway I'll probably add more. I'm so glad to have your support on it! I love this story since it was the first one I'd finished, but now it's time to amp it up. you know, when I have a chance.
I do have to tell you though that What Means Most which is Post War has more Cora in it, and more holes I've hopefully filled gaps and will fill more as I go.
Thank you so much for the wonderful ideas, and really, thank you for the support! This review is absolutely awesome, 'cause it's not just about the story, it encourages me to do my best :D Thank you!


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