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Review:charlottetrips says:
This was so lovely! So lovely that I demand you write more now! *pounds desk in petulance* :)

You lent such a bittersweet air to the whole story with Narcissa missing her school sweetheart but being willing to give it all up for the good of the family. How you worded it and showed how Narcissa came to that decision was really done well.

I do have questions in regards to how Narcissa didn't know the proud Malfoy name or seemed to not even know about Lucius' blood status and such. This would seem to me to be a fact that Lucius would prominently display at Hogwarts or that she would be made aware of by someone at the school since everyone talks about everyone. Maybe I'm not supposed to care about these details but they do kind of stick in my mind.

Other than that, I was pulled into Narcissa's anxiety and sadness over losing her lover. The little details of going through the motions to get herself ready, how the memories seamlessly were incorporated and the step by step motions you let us follow made Narcissa that much more real a character. And the ending was so sweet to read after all the turmoil! ♥


Author's Response: Awww, thank you! Haha; your desk-pounding made me laugh out loud. :) I originally intended this to be a one-shot, but several people have been asking for more... so I might just end up continuing it. *winks*

You're the first to comment on the bitter-sweetness of the story, and I'm glad you did. I didn't even realize that's what I was going for until you said it. :) And *whew*! I'm really glad that you felt Narcissa's decision was explained; I was worried about that!

As far as the whole "Lucius and Narcissa not knowing each other's last names" thing, I wasn't sure how far apart they are in age or if they were at Hogwarts at the same time, so for the purposes of this story I just kind of ignored the whole "Hogwarts" thing. I just imagined the two of them meeting at the Hog's Head or something and deciding not to ask about each other's last names or blood status because they were so interested in one another. In hindsight I really wish I'd explained that. Oh well, that'll just be something to explain if I write a prequel! :)

Eep! I'm super-thrilled that you found the emotions to be life-like and that Narcissa seemed like more of a real character! *Sighs* I rather love the ending, myself. :)

Thank you SO, SO much, dear! I can't tell you how much your kind and thoughtful review means to me!

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