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Review:justonemorefic says:
Ahhh! The story continues :3 Do I get to be your first review?

We jump straight into the mystery, I love it. You've spun a whole world on your own, and whenever I read this universe, I'm always so willing to accept the elements that have deviated from JKR's world.

How I miss your writing on these two. I can feel the stress getting to them, in the details. Lily bristled at Severus's professorial tone. Next, he'd be asking where she'd left her laboratory report. They're both weary and there's no time to do anything but worry. And I remember how short of a time it's been! It's only been months since the betrayal :( it still looms over Lily.

This intro was so lovely, especially for people like me with a spotty memory. I get little tidbits of all the loose threads in Unwritten and already I feel its setting taking root in my mind again.



Author's Response: Yay Gina! Thanks for coming by! I'm glad you are along for the ride. I hope it doesn't drive you bananas having to read each chapter as it comes out this time instead of after it's done!

I love bickering Severus and Lily, they are both exhausted as you said and acting like old friends in nasty moods. (or an old married couple...) I see a couple of boo-boos in this chapter that I must remind myself to fix! word overuse and such.

Thank you for being my first reviewer!!


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