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Review:Moonyxluna says:
Great chapter :) I loved all the action with the Voldemort in Knockturn Alley scene, especially the inclusion of the Prewett brothers. I think it was very well written, and I was glad to see some Lupin :) Even for the brief moment he was mentioned I liked what you did with his character. He's my favorite, so I always like to see him(: )

I'm going to take a guess that Dumbledore wants to see the four boys when they get back to school about joining the Order of the Phoenix?

Even from the first chapter to here, I can see a huge improvement with the little punctuation stuff, so great job on that. Like I said before though, I really like think taking one extra readthrough of your work before you post it helps loads :)

I hope these reviews helped at least a little! You have a lovely start here to this story, so keep it up! I'll be looking for updates for sure :)

Author's Response: I figured I would have to include something with Voldemort in it considering the Era of the story. I plan on including a lot more Lupin throughout the story as he is a key player in Sirius's life. =)

Your guess is spot on. I wanted a chaos situation to tie the boys together with the Order + pull at Dumbledore's interest with James's cloak.

Your reviews have helped me a lot with not only helping me think of what can be changed when I write/edit before posting, but build my confidence that the story is displaying in words as I see it in my mind.

Thank you so much for reviewing my story and it's chapters! =)


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