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Review:Loopy456 says:
Hi again :) I have to say that I have really enjoyed this chapter. I'm usually more of a NextGen sort of person (as you may have noticed from my stories!) but this was excellent. Quite light and fluffy to start off with, but there's nothing wrong with that. I love the relationship that Lily and the Marauder's seem to have, and I'm wondering where Peter will fit into this when he arrives.
I did notice one little error with your tenses. In this sentence 'Even Remus Lupin would make her happy, as he is part of James and Siriusí closest group of friends' you have two tenses in there at once. The 'he is' doesn't fit with the rest of your narrative which is in the 'he was' form.
I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next so please update soon!

Alex :D

Author's Response: Thank you :)
Oh yes, I usually stick to Marauders not NextGen...
Ah, Peter, hoping to avoid that. Haha, no I have a plan!
Ah- thanks for pointing that out, I remember thinking there was something strange about that sentence.
I should be updating...soon-ish... hopefully.
-Kerryn xx thank you!


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