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Review:inkbutterfly says:
*Reluctantly starts writing review*
Uh, well, the thing is... I dont really like it that much. I was... disappointed. *shudder*

Explanation: Okay, it was good. No flaws in the writing or anything, but it felt as if something was missing. I'm not sure why, but thats how I feel.
Maybe the whole finding this guy and becoming all happy was rushed. I'm not sure. I think that the part where he talked to her was good, but the little bit after, maybe more details?
It seems as if her happiness comes to quickly for me to process that its changed, and that she is happy.

Okay, now I have made it sound like its all bad. It's not!
It's almost brilliant! I like it, very much so, but I know that you are amazing at writing and truthfully, you can do better.
Oh, I hate being all harsh.
Hopefully you get what I'm trying to say.

Now for my favourite bit, the praising!
I loved the whole cliche running in the rain scene. Because, admit it, it is. But I liked it anyway.
Also, Audreys reaction to the drawing was good. I like Leigh, and it was very unexpected that he was a muggle. I'm glad you didnt make her memory come back, that would have been too much of a perfect, fairytale ending and also compeltely unbelievable.

So, mixed reaction? Sorry, but its true...
-Kerryn xx

PS. I will reply to the PM, its just my computer has been stuffing up...

Author's Response: Okay, I shall work on the stuff you suggested. :D Thank you! It is very much appreciated.

Also, I LOVE CLICHES. Omnomnom. It took all my willpower not to have a) them kiss, then b) the rain stop/ sun comes out/ a rainbow appears and then c) her memories all coming back in a flood. Probably with the ones about Leigh first.

Thanks for the review, I shall look again at this chapter :D xx


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