|Review:||Toujours Padfoot says:|
Dominique's husband was eaten by the kraken. The kraken!! That is brilliant and I love how you threw that in there so casually. Poor Dominique.
I want to point out a particular bit that I really liked:
Dressed in robes of subtly-patterned grey, he was a vision of London's deepest fog, his hair a flash of pale gold like the light of a hinkypunk leading unfortunate travellers astray.
The imagery there is just gorgeous.
I recognize this scene! Ahh, this makes me want to watch Pride & Prejudice. I just might do that after I'm finished typing up this review. Rose is the perfect protagonist and I like that you've made her resemble Elizabeth Bennet without making her Elizabeth Bennet. She's still very much your character. Her inner thoughts are quite amusing to read. She's clumsy and awkward and very ill-at-ease in such a place with so many people whirling around in circles, but she appears to be trying to make the best of things.
While she was trying to mimic the socialites in order to fit in, growing nervous that wizards outside of her family weren't asking her to dance, it made me feel so sorry for her. It also made me like her so much more than I already did, because there's something endearing in the way that she tries to please people who expect things of her even though it's essentially degrading. She's the odd duck, the woman who's way ahead of her time in her convictions, and here she is confined to a room of spinning dresses and stuffy men, out of her element.
To part with one's brains for the sake of society's expectations...poor Rose. Although I'm feeling less sorry for her than I am for Scorpius at this point. I can only imagine that she's going to build up some nice steam and a sharp tongue and then unleash it on him when she gets the chance. I'm rooting for her to squash his ego!
Excellent chapter! I enjoyed it very much. :)
Author's Response: There's a giant squid, so why not a kraken too? XD I think I must have been thinking about "Sense and Sensibility and Sea Monsters" at the time - as horrible as that book is, the random appearance of sea monsters is too hilarious to resist. Poor Dominique is right, though - it actually mirrors what happened to Austen's sister's fiancee, who also died at sea (Cassandra never married because of it).
Anyway, I'm glad that you liked that line about Scorpius! I worried that it went overboard with the imagery which isn't particularly Austen-esque, but it was too pretty to remove from the story. It also gave me an opportunity to describe Scorpius not as silver, but grey - drab, plain grey like the hated fog. But it's great that you liked that part! ^_^
Yes! You've got it! That's just what I wanted to do with Rose. She's in Lizzie's role, but she isn't Lizzie - she's got a bit of Kitty or Lydia in her, too, in her reckless behaviour and open emotions. I always imagine Lizzie as having more poise, which is one reason Darcy falls for her, but Rose is more rebellious and very much the country cousin. It's fantastic that you picked up on that difference - re-writing a famous book is daunting and I keep wondering whether I'm making the main characters too similar to Austen's.
Oh, that moment when no one asks her to dance was a painful one to write. She's put into that horrible wallflower situation, feeling like everyone can see that she's different and "wrong", like she's marked. She does, at that moment, really want to belong, but it's not her place - she and that society are incompatible.
Haha, poor Scorpius is right. :P You'll see.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story! It means a lot to hear from you and I appreciate that you took the time to write this amazing review! ^_^