|Review:||Toujours Padfoot says:|
He peered down on her with squinting eyes, having refused long ago to wear spectacles of any sort lest they pollute his pristine image of the highest fashion.
- Oh, Albus. Bahaha. I've really grown attached to Albus in fanfiction as of late, and this version is very enjoyable. Not wearing glasses because he was worried it would damage his pretty appearance! He's got his priorities in a nice little row, doesn't he.
I absolutely love Lily. If so much as a napkin falls over, everything's in tatters and her whole world spirals out of control. If someone looks at another person oddly, she is mortified and is instantly a martyr for having to witness such a horrifying spectacle.
The characterizations of everyone is marvelous. I like how you painted Dumbledore as Harry's great mentor who succumbed to the revolution's lust for the lives of the brave and good. He's like a grand war hero here - completely the same as in the regular Potterverse, and yet completely different. It's such an impressive thing you've done, spinning everyone into roles appropriate for the time period and for a story that mirrors Pride and Prejudice. The tweaks like that makes this so much fun to read.
The number of spells required for so drastic an alteration in appearance would be far more than this poor author has time to list.
- Ha! Breaking the fourth wall! I appreciate that bit of narration; you've got this elaborate flowery setting and proper dialogue and then you throw in a little bit of "surprise!" so that the story can't take itself too seriously.
Ginny is fantastic. Strong and sturdy and knows what she wants. It's astounding that someone like Lily came out of her - Lily is painfully aware of every flaw around her, her mind magnifying all of them. Rose must drive her nuts. It's going to be delightful to watch Rose embarrass her just by acting like a human.
Lovely chapter! I'm off to make dinner and then I shall come back to read the next one. ^ ^
Author's Response: Your review has me in giggles, though I'm already at wit's end, so perhaps I've neared the breaking point, but still, you picked out the most hilarious of things, and I'm very glad of it. Like that breaking of the fourth wall - I couldn't resist it, and it seemed like something Austen would do to properly put readers in their place and make them reassess what's going on (not to mention shamelessly poking fun at the characters, which she does relentlessly). I'm glad that you liked that little detail - a throw-away line in many ways, but it does exactly what you said. :D
The Potter children are very messed up, that's the best way of saying it. XD Both very OCD, especially Lily - I hadn't meant to make her that way, but what you say is perfectly true, that she's unable to deal properly with anything that interferes with perfection. She's the ultimate perfectionist, and anything less really, really bothers her. Poor girl. And Albus! I usually make him the down-to-earth Potter, but I needed a crazy fop, and in strolled Albus. I wonder how many people back then refused to wear their glasses because it wasn't stylish to do so - they must have often suffered, and this aspect of Albus will become important later on. ;)
Thank you so much for your review! I didn't expect something of such length and detailed observations, but I'm extremely thankful for it - you've given me a few ideas for the coming chapters, little things that will help tie the whole together really well. :D