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Review:baletgir says:
This was a really nice start to this piece. I really enjoyed it.

I think it took your writing a bit to really get into a good flow. Beginning around where we realize that Molly's lost her memory, your writing was very good. To be honest, before that it was a bit lacking. I'm not sure if maybe the entire chapter needs to be in the same serious tone that the second half is in, but Bessie was throwing me off a bit. She didn't fit with the rest of what was going on. It was obviously a very serious situation that had occurred with some sort of accident occurring within the hospital, I'm hoping you'll clear this up in the next chapter, but here is Bessie too calm for me.

As I said before, I really enjoyed the second half of this. I found it so interesting. I'm really liking Molly as you have characterized her. She seems likable, which is rare for her in fanfiction. I am really excited to read the rest and see how she copes with everything, and hopefully find out more information.

This chapter set up a lot of things. I hope that two more chapters is enough to answer all the millions of questions swimming around in my head right now! I'm off to see!

Thank you so much for entering my challenge! I hope you enjoyed participating! The results will be posted in the Challenges Hall of Fame thread, and the winners with be PM'd on the forums! Good luck!

:)BaletGir

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked my version of Molly, and I'm going to take your criticisms on board and re-write the first half of the chapter, although I'm not sure that I'll get it up in time for your deadline :(

I really did enjoy writing this for your challenge, and I'll look out for any more challenges which you put up! :D


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