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Review:academica says:
Hi! I've come by to review your entry ♥

I really love the way you began this story -- you instantly made me feel like there was a pervasive atmosphere of fear in the plot. I could easily put myself in Jane's shoes, peeking around corners and checking food twice in order to avoid succumbing to the dark nature that claimed so many others.

I really love the messy, disjointed way you described Remus's relationship with Jane, too. Again, I feel a lot of sympathy for her, and the messiness seems to work with the overall feel of the plot. The identity checks are a nice way to hearken back to canon, since they were so important to poor Remus, and I liked the awkward way in which they interacted in the present. I think the way you wrote them, with her trying to figure him out and be there for him and him pulling away even now that he knows she has the best of intentions, is just really perfect. It reminds me of Remus/Tonks, but not so much that Jane seems like a copy of her, not in the least. It's a delicate balance and I can't complain one bit about it.

The ending to this was nice, too -- you've created a good bit of suspense, and I definitely want to read on when you have more posted. I can't wait to see what you'll do next! :)

Excellent -- I'm really impressed with your entry.

Amanda

Author's Response: Hey! :) Sorry for the delay in my response. :( I hope you can forgive me.

I'm really glad that you thought I worked the balance well. I wanted to show some hints of the Remus we knew in the books, but I didn't want to overdo it.

I'm working on the second chapter - with how long the queue is, it will hopefully in the queue by the deadline but not validated. :( I'm glad you like the story so much, though, and I hope I don't disappoint. :)


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