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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hi, i'm here for your review!

Okay, so my first impression of this was overall good. I think it's an interesting perspective today and i've always wondered about Mary because we never hear what happened to her. I love when people explore characters that never got a lot of show time and I think that you take on this is so interesting. Especially bringing the link to Fabian as well.

I think you have a really interesting take on this as well as we don't typically see the war from a mothers perspective. (other than Lily's anyway). So it's incredible to see how another woman grow into herself and be willing to go down fighting and not hiding in a corner.

I really liked the changes we saw in Mary and i think you explored many of those emotions fairly well. It was interesting to see her contemplating her past fearless self but as we can see, she is full of it now and i think that the war can do that to a person. It can either make a person stronger or tear down all their defences and destroy them which i think is clear here with Mary. I also see the desperate woman willing to do anything for her baby and i like to see that spark in a person.

I really liked the letter idea or, at least, the part where she seemed to be talking to her unborn child, but i also felt like there was just so much of it that it distracted from the feelings of the story. It felt too much of a letter and i couldn't help but think that if she was about to be attacked, writing a letter would be the last thing she'd be doing. I feel like if it had been more of a running thought in her head it might have been a bit smoother.

Also, although i really liked how she grew into really wanting to go down fighting, i felt like the switch of her hiding in a corner and then being ready to go down fighting was a little too fast since the whole chapter had sort of been about this down trodden woman, i felt like that end part could have been developed a bit more.

I do think you have an interesting start here and i really like the perspective and voice though. I hope you have found this review helpful
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Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review and I feel horrible about taking so, so very long to get to writing a response to it! It's been so helpful!

I did go back and reread the chapter, and I suppose you are right about how much of the letter there is in there. But when I was writing the chapter, I was worried that if all this was put into thought only, it would get a little boring or tedious. Maybe that was the right decision, but hey, I'm still learning! :D

Again, huge thanks for this wonderful review!

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