Another great chapter. Really, you have Moody down perfectly! I liked all the details about him, things that Rowling never revealed. All of her characters were essentially plot devices for Harry, so it was interesting to see Moody in his element. It was so funny of him to have a house like that, and so true, too. All the precautions were totally like him, and I like how by reading this I get the sense that he's just this grumpy old man in retirement, something that he would hate being called. Again, my only real criticism is your paragraphs but that's an easy fix. Your ending was BRILLIANT, I liked how you didn't draw it out. You really have a gift with language and description and all of it is so realistic. Excellent job. Come by my thread, I'd love to review something by you again! 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am so glad you think that I've done Moody well. I just wrote him the way I pictured him to be. I was kinda going for a Sherlock Holmes type figure, because the idea for this fic came to me after I watched that new BBC series "Sherlock" over Christmas.
Yeah, I've divided that long paragraphs here too, sorry about that. Cheers for pointing it out. I've also changed the last line a bit too; just so it's clear to the reader that Moody isn't dead, that he is defeated, not dead. Aside from that little ambiguity, I'm glad you liked the ending, I do too!
I am really glad that you want me to come by your thread again! That was a very nice compliment to get! I've nine stories up at the minute, mostly Remus Lupin related (he is my favourite character you see), one about Ron, and another about the Founders and another about Harry and Teddy. I kinda like writing stuff that's a bit outside the box. I've two stories written from the point of view of very small children - 3 year old Ron "Why I'm Afraid of Spiders", and 5 year old Lupin "The Quiet Before All Bad Things". Em... I'm not going to request for one of those - you see, I only request when I feel there is a problem with something I've written and I just can't figure out what, either that or it's not getting read/reviewed a lot and I just want some feedback. I'd feel a bit mean/selfish requesting a review for any of the nine stories I have up now because they have a good number of reviews already and I'd kinda feel as if I was sort of hogging review spots on the forums, if you get me. Feel free to take a look at them if you like, I'd really love to know what you think, but I wouldn't feel right requesting a review for them, just because I would feel a bit mean/selfish hogging spots when my stories have a good number of reviews already... But, all that aside, I'll be putting up some new stuff fairly soon (working on a new one-shot and a new novella too) and when I have them up I'll give you a shout on your thread and if you would be so kind as to review I'd love it - I'd feel no guilt at all requesting a review for a new story you see, if that makes any sense at all!! :)
Thank you again for taking the time to read and review my story (massive paragraphs and all!). I am so glad you liked it, and I'm swinging from the lights here because you gave it a 10/10 - thanks for making me smile! :)