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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

This is beautiful, simply beautiful. I love the way you wrote it, interspersing the past and the present, the backstory and the main- it created a very powerful effect that would not have been achieved if you had written it in a linear fashion.

Though at times I found it the abrupt changes between the past and the present a little confusing, within a few sentences the time period would become evident. Otherwise I felt that the flow between parts worked well with the mood of the story. In particular, I loved the way the "flashbacks"/backstories intersected with the italicized text- it definitely didn't seem as though you chose those moments at random. The Tale of the Three Brothers, Fred's "marriage moment", his talk with Harry- they all added to the story, making the relationships richer and making the conclusion of the story that much more heartwrenching.

I found no problems with your characterization- I think that you wrote everyone very well. Though the next-generation characters have no set personality, I feel that you made them real, more than just names and blank faces. You gave them histories and, especially in the case of Victoire and Teddy, gave depth to their relationships. As for Harry and Andromeda, I think that you did an excellent job with their interaction with Teddy. You wrote Harry very well- you made it seem as though Harry had gone through the same thing and was phrasing his comments in accordance with these experiences without expressly stating this.

As I mentioned before, I loved the way you interspersed the "main" story inbetween rich details. I had originally thought that Teddy would be the one to die and was waiting for something bad to happen to him... I was surprised when the story started to focus on Fred. However I think that you wrote the moments leading up to Fred's death very well- I was very tense, waiting for catastrophe to strike. The way you gave Fred a "second chance" was particularly devasting because I wasn't expecting the disaster that occurred just moments later. Poor Teddy.

Poor everyone.

Teddy's reaction to the event was very realistic and very emotional, both in the immediate aftermath and in the days/weeks (months?) that followed. I think that you showed his guilt in a very effective manner and the ending you wrote was very powerful- "Fred Weasley was dead.". It was the ending we were expecting, a solid, unmovable finale, and it fit perfectly with the rest of the story.

All in all I think that you did a great job with this story in characterization, plot and delivery. Thanks for requesting and I hope that my comments are helpful!

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