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Review:SeverusSnape15 says:
Hello, Cierra here from the forums with your review.

This story is VERY meaningful. It made me want to cry at the end, because the quote is so pretty, so fitting to the story. I love the consept, but I think Sirius is a bit uncanon. That's okay, though, not everything has to be utterly canon.

I think the best thing I can say is that you need a beta for this story. You have many grammarical errors. It looks like you just typed it up and didn't go back through it. There's things such as two of the same words, one after the other, lack of commas, etc.

I also think you need more background. Sure, it was sad, but I don't know anything about Aura enough to feel TOO sad. It doesn't make me want to cry for days, but just a bit. I'd love to see more detail as well. Describe your surroundings, tell us what is around her. I'd love to see more on the wedding, as it seems they married. :)

Thank you for requesting :) Feel free to re-request anytime!

Cierra.

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