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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey! This is apocalypse, here with your review!

Well, this is quite something! =) I think that the most attractive thing about your story at the moment is the plot. I've always liked stories that focus on the lives of the secondary characters and I feel like I'm going to like this one too. I think that the way you started out with the chapter was amazing. No one can imagine how painful the branding of the mark must be and I think that you did an excellent job in describing the pain he felt and what he thought of it. The fact that you compared it to the Cruciatus Curse was very interesting; it magnified the significance of the pain he was enduring and I think it was all written excellently!

I think that Voldemort was very much in character. THe way everyone feared him was written brilliantly; his arrogance and his evil aura came out very nicely. I'm glad that you've chosen to write the story from Regulus' perspective, it adds a new dimension to your story and allows your readers to experience the world from the Death Eater point of view.

Your story is definitely plausible as it's a canon fact that Regulus was a Death Eater. However, I can't say much about the plausibility right now, seeing as I have no idea how you will carry on Reg's life in the upcoming chapters. I do know that its like-able due to the fact that Regulus did not do this for the love of Voldemort only and that he still has some sense in him. The fact that you've been able to grab your readers' attention by making them wonder what's going to happen with Regulus is a plus point for your story which ensures that people like it no matter what =)

Sirius' letter was another great idea. The fact that he cares about his brother and wishes him to get back on track in his life is very sweet and totally like Sirius. I really liked that.

I think I'll address you areas of concern in more detail in the next review seeing as how this chapter was pretty short and did not have much content to comment on. A good story though =)

Author's Response: Yay! I'm really happy that you liked the beginning of this story. I know that the character is not the most popular choice especially compared to Reg's brother, but when I read Rowling's books, I always thought that there must be something more to Regulus's story. So I decided to give him a chance.

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