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Review:Elenia says:
Heey! Elenia here with your review!

You've got a really interesting start for your story here! I liked that so many things happened and it made want to read forwards to find out more!

I know it's a crossover, but since I haven't seen this PLL, I have no idea how much this resembles the original. So I'll just skip that part from my review d:

That being said, let's start with flow and pacing. I think they were a bit rushed. You might want to read the story once more, and add some descriptions here and there, that would improve it a lot! Especially in the beginning. I felt I was just thrown in the middle of a scene where a lot of things happened and I met many new people, but it was already over before I noticed. So maybe try adding something to it? Maybe slow it up a bit with more background information?

About characters, well, we learned a few things about them, but nothing really important. But as this is just the first chapter, I'm not going say anything else about that. I'm sure it will get better in the next chapters (:

But I really do like this, I think the plot is really interesting and with a few little improvements this could be a great story!

Keep writing! I'm interested in seeing where this story is going (:

Author's Response: Thank yous o much for your review. :) I didn't really know where to start the story - I guess I shouldn't have really started it if I didn't know, but that's all right. Thank you very much for the insite!!!

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